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【分享】我的一篇18分的英语作文,与大家分享,有不足之处还望指点

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以下是我的作文,还请大家指点!

How is society responsible for Tyler Durden's disrupted personality?



What is life? To answer it, here comes an excellent sentence into my mind:” Life is like a box of chocolates!” everyone wants to taste it, wants to be possessed by it , but not everyone can truly feel the same taste of life. Tyler Durden, a young man who has mental problems in his life, always feels two tastes of life in his world: one is in his white world, another is in his black world. But actually, all that he has done, he has though, whenever at night or in the daytime, he can not feel which is right to do. The society slowly changed him into daytime life, but at night, he can see his real life, the real man he wants to be, full of energy, power, courage to do anything, even anything impossible, like building a fight club!
Now a real question comes into my mind, who is Tyler himself? What is his real personality? What can a true man be? Tyler who lived in his black world had mentioned that: a man isn’t his job, isn’t how much money he has in the bank, isn’t the car he drives, isn’t the contents of his wallet, a true man is the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world, who is free to anything that he’s able to do. In my opinion, I agree with him, we are living ourselves not for the others, we are living to live.
But the real life now Tyler touches in his daytime is not the ideal world he wants to own. Everything is full of pressure, full of competition, full of pretense, full of sham, everything is a copy of a copy of a copy, that’s the most ruthless part of Tyler’s life even in ours. Life is beautiful, can not be like that, something foolish,and you can't always live in your imagination. So he comes to be another person in his own mind at night, for what? Not only to fight for fun, but also to win his man’s life back. But actually and finally, he finds that he can not change his life, his life is continuing to an black end which he can’t stop it anymore, what he has done at night has let hoim follow the wrong path. He thinks that he’s slowly destroying not only his life but also the other young guys’ lives, who maybe could have another chance to change their future. This can not be his real end in his true life. So he stopped himself at night, actually, he has killed himself for disengagement. Life is life, can’t be changed easily, society is so hard to be improved into a right way. If he continues doing this again and again, what he’ll do, is to destroy other young man’s lives, which couldn’t be Tyler’s real end in his mind.
I think this film is one of the best films I’ve seen, this is a tragedy, all we can do is only thinking and thinking,but if we really want to change the society, it could be a long, long way to go!
2007-6-4 22:10:53

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2007-6-4 22:13:37

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呵呵,楼上的,我也会出现这种情况的,但是英语的确十分重要,千万不要忽视啊!呵呵!
2007-6-4 22:20:59

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2007-6-4 22:28:52

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慢慢来吧!
2007-6-4 22:30:08

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无法看下去
英语看了神经难受
2007-6-4 22:41:18

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ddd
2007-6-4 22:47:06

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great job
2007-6-4 23:55:04

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如果不介意可以把字体该大点吗

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fight club 好看吗
2007-6-4 23:56:41

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Post by Léon_Ou
今天心情不错,发一篇我的考试作文,以下是我的一篇得了18分的英语短文,是篇电影评论,关于<Fight Club>这部电影的,用近一个小时完成,得了我们系里的最高分,现在想和大家分享一下,有不足之处还请大家指点!
注:文章已修改过,基本没有单词和语法错误.


Congrats!!!! Keep up the good work.
2007-6-5 01:35:36

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what does the title mean exactly
2007-6-5 05:00:09

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<Fight club>就是Brea Pitt演的<搏击俱乐部>,相信不少同学应该看过的,还是很不错的一部电影!推荐一下
2007-6-5 09:18:01

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r u freakin' kidding me? your essay is badly written and I can't see how it actually earned u the top score. anyway, congrats!!!!
这位学长,如果我有不足之处还请您指点,但请慎用
r u freakin' kidding me
,这句话,而且,你说的
your essay is badly written and I can't see how it actually earned u the top score
,你不觉得很打消别人的积极性吗?By the way,u can't always critique or even judge the others' job like that, I really hope u can see it?
And, if I've got some mistakes in my written English, I really want someone coulde help me improve it. Thank u for your congratulation!
2007-6-5 09:35:56

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2007-6-5 18:18:04

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2007-6-5 18:46:30

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